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    dots Submission Name: poetry who is to saydots

    Author: brokenbatman
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 475/233/44
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       take time to actually read some things and help us grow can you find the hidden messsage, if you can you are ready to help the rest of us

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    dotspoetry who is to saydots

    Sorry if i affended anyone with my words
    the ones that cut and tear
    Appologies go out to the poeple who feel
    humiliated or compromised
    Explanations are in order to go out to all
    with smiles and lies
    Branded a vile foul mouthed little twirp
    sharp tongue attacks
    Brandishing a pearle coated switch blade tongue
    used for cheeks to smack
    Words destroy families and leave them to suffer
    all alone so cold
    Words to the wicked I am coming for you
    lock your shudders up
    Don't let the lyrical butcher in for a fight
    your words lack emotion
    Dictionary isn't big enough slip the lock
    better to sleep on it
    Challenges to me are many and all defeated
    some left autistic in my wake
    Slammed face first into the earth the fallen
    finding the only one left to hold em
    This doesn't rhyme to good use know
    ok and freeverse
    That flow is a little akward you see
    how about qouted lines
    There is not enough imagarey inside
    how about imagination
    Those words are to harsh for my ears
    how about opening your mind
    Critics the world over can criticize for eternity
    but only a passionate poet can
    others to
    create a pathway to
    the hiddden emotions found inside
    of the secret poets place
    thier hearts

    Submitted on 2004-05-15 03:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      SLIGHTLY confusing, but good nonetheless. i like the topic of your piece here and it was very descriptive and vivid. definitely have some spelling errors throughout here, but those can be easily fixed. very nice..
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      There are a few spelling mistakes and toward the end it grew a little confusing...well I thought so anyway. But other than that it was fairly good. All in al I liked it. Keep trying.
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by sadistchild | [ Reply to This ]

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