Description: ok im goin 2 try and do this the whole poem is something i wrote in agust of 2005 except da last stanza or w/e da positive thing! i dunno if its gonna fit so u can tell me and be honest! BRUTALLY HONEST!!!
and i cant spell so calm down!
um... ok i completly didnt follow my notebook bcz as i was typing i didnt like it no more!! ok well im not its not like yall is gonna read this anyway!!! um is this depressing or longingum..... crap..... i really dont understand da diffrence cuz its like most of da time when ur longing for something that something can make u depressed but that could just be me!! hey wat da hell depression!
Rise Again -------------------------------------------
Head spinning with pain
Trying hard not to cry
But the tears keep streming down my eyes
The pain is sepping into my soul
Sick of the pain. Weak, drowning in the rain.
Trying hard to make it through this life. Of stress pain and lies.
I'm trapt behing this door.
That will never poen. Surrounded my darkness. Lost beneath the cracks.
This is how I felt when I was to blind to see
what was surrounding me. I was slowly breaking down. Deeper and deeper into a depression that was my own fault.
Being angry and the world but the only person I was truly mad at was me. For hurting those who love me.
I have to bring myself out of this shell that has completly surrounded me. I just begin and love me for me!
I like the relazation of true anger within your poem. The descriptions are very good. But what really distracts is your typing mistakes and your spelling. I think you should really revise this. But I like the jaggedness of this poem, it gives it character. The anger and frustration shows through in the format of the peom...