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Alabama Sky


Author: iluvpoetry_1
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Alabama Sky



Sweet smell of grass tells me that were right around the corner.

The beautiful pecan trees take me straight into the front yard.

As I walk by the horses and talk to the clucking chickens.

I see my grandma and i rush into her arms.The smell of her jacket

Still smells the same. Like fresh cherries and apple pie.

Her tiny cottage house still looks just the same.

Along with the same bedroom with a bed that still has my name.

I love visiting my grandmother. This is my home.

~akaila~




Submitted on 2006-07-03 12:59:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Never been 2 Alabama but I heard it is beautiful! Have 2 visit sometime in the near future see whats everyone talking about! "Sweet Home Alabama" My version is "Rotton Polluted New Jersey" Keep it up kiddo!
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  almost makes me want to move bama. U make it sound so homy. The line w/ te pecans made me feel really stpid cause i was all pecans grow on trees and then i thought about it and i was all duh where the hell else do nuts come from. Te he that line just made me think something really dirty. newayz g2g!

~Gena~
| Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  Cute and sweet.
I love the innocence that is brought out within the poem, and also an almost sad longing, looking back into the past but seeing it as a wonderful memory. I love it.
| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
  Very Beautiful
I have very vivid memories of my Grandma who I called MEMA as well
I have the name MEMA tattoed on my right arm as well
She was my hope my Life and my Best friend
She would have done anything to better me
I Love and miss her Dearly
Thank You for bringing back some of the beautiful memories we shared
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This is cute, but I think that if you lived in Alabama all the time you wouldn't like it so much. :D One word sums everything up: HUMIDITY. But nonetheless, this was a heartfelt poem. Very sweet and easily relatable. xD
LeAnna
| Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, it's easy to relate to and I can cleary picture it.
good job


| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]


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