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    dots Submission Name: sweet little thingdots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       another side of me, and no im not skitz!


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    dotssweet little thingdots
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    they see me and and think im such a sweet little thing/
    but i have done things that i keep well hidden within/
    i keep a smile on the outside for everyone to see/
    but they will never get to know the real me./
    i can talk for hours become your best friend/
    but all will become clear at the very end./
    i can dress up or down, i could suit you/
    be that something borrowed, blue, old or new./
    keep track of the time, when im with you it could slip,/
    you wanna taste of what im living like, here take a sip./
    im in total control, i have the remote/
    to keep up with me you better take notes/
    i can tear people down, or build them up high/
    but to take over me, you wouldnt dare try!






    Submitted on 2006-07-03 16:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi darl!
    u got this to a T, u never can tell can u, likin the flow and lyrics baby grl,
    shae rae x
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by shae_indauk | [ Reply to This ]
      ha
    this was on point
    it had descent flow wit reall nice rhymes
    ' i can dress up or down, i could suit you/
    be that something borrowed, blue, old or new./
    keep track of the time, when im with you it could slip,/
    you wanna taste of what im living like, here take a sip./'

    These lines were good
    you came hard in this one...im a fan
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good...I'm really lookin forward to our collaboration...I know that [censored]s gonn be hot...anyway you did good on this

    deuce up
    jsells
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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