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    dots Submission Name: A Poet's Handdots

    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 302/257/81
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsA Poet's Handdots

    The candle burned light with ashes that flared
    No longer night not that night never dared
    Into the darkness of day I had stared
    I searched for the meaning that I ever cared.

    A moment in silence and with my script and my pen
    The ink never smeared, has not now nor then
    When the candle declared the moment to end.

    The curtain swayed with the wind that blew into the room
    I tried to think of a reason that day came so soon
    But my thoughts were fading, it was that I failed the moon.

    Not an idea the night spared me for the papers sake
    An empty script and a plot the pen couldn't make
    Not even the view of the blue shake less lake.

    My hand trembled as I approached a word from my mind
    The room was so bare that words I couldn't find
    My inspiration at a moment like this was so blind.

    Until I found that not even the stars in the night
    Could inspire me more than my will and my might
    To in script beautiful words that indeed I did write
    On this silent, windy and meaningful night.

    Submitted on 2006-07-03 22:53:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Both writers and those who attempt to write know well this feeling and state of mind as the muses of creativity wax and wane like that orb in the night sky. Have we all not written of this in frustrating moments such portrays? Nice work.

    | Posted on 2017-07-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work...it is very iintreting to read. I likr the flow and it was just all in all very well done. Great work
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work...it is very iintreting to read. I likr the flow and it was just all in all very well done. Great work
    | Posted on 2006-12-14 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work, i think the fact that you put this one under "passion" is awesome, the poem definitely expresses very descriptively the search for inspiration to write, that passion to write is what makes us poets, nice poem you are an amazing talent...
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by Kasper187 | [ Reply to This ]
      One of my favorites Sharon. Reading ur poetry makes me see this other side of you, that even though we have been best friends i do not always see.
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      I could almost picture the scene and setting of this piece. I can definitely understand where you're coming from as far as the emotions and feelings of wanting to pen/scrawl/script/write/whatever a new piece. For some of us inspiration to write is difficult to find and yet we often find that it is what alot of us live for. Not being able to write or not being able to find the right words for what we want to say can be frustrating as all hell until we finally have chiselled through that wall of brick to find the tunnel to the literary paradise on the other side. A very good write, and thanks for sharing.

    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by lynxstarfire | [ Reply to This ]
      a moment in silence and with my script and my pen,
    the ink never smeared, has not now, has not then,
    when the candle declared the moment to end

    those were my favorite lines. this one is weird. it seems like he's searching for motivation in all the wrong places. in the night, in the lake. maybe he should've looked for new sources for him to take something from. writer's block is a [censored]
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      An interesting piece about a poet with writer's block.

    Good use of scenery to add to all of the inspiration that the poet has, just doesn't tap into.

    Quick question though: did the poet write (like it says in the last stanza), or was that just a typo? Let me know.

    Nice job making a negative point of writing into a good poem.

    Peace, TK
    ps: If you have some spare time, please take a look at my work.
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by ThomasKane | [ Reply to This ]

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