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    dots Submission Name: Second Bestdots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1098
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 564



    Description:
       This is more of a story line than a poem but whatever.....


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    dotsSecond Bestdots
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    shots are fired
    the competition is under way
    I struggle
    work at it
    only to find that he's ahead
    ...never even broke a sweat
    I hear cheering
    but it isn't my name being called
    so I work even harder
    only to be hurt once again
    while the cheering continues
    the the audience roars
    this competition has finally come to an end
    and I was not victorious
    but I wasn't surprised
    I have finally become accustomed
    to being second best





    Submitted on 2006-07-03 23:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great work!
    definitely something i can relate to...
    maybe there's a very good reason why you're second best : )

    ~tina~
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by tina_mik | [ Reply to This ]
      
    I can picture the race in my head while reading it, interesting and very capturing, don't you just hate being the second best, I like the line “I wasn't victorious” , very nice work

    have a nice day
    ~~Drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      dude u dont gotta be numbah one.is all good its okay to be second best. i lilke u just da way u is

    well peace out

    Da Grim Reaperesssss
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      wow nice work man. its very interesting and deep. sometimes we're just made to be second best and acceptance is better than trying to fight it out. well i loved this piece very much.

    cheers
    bubba
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by bubbasamuel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad. Especially the last line. I'm not usually the kind of person that cares about winning, but when I work extremely hard on something I expect to do well. And when I don't, I get angry at myself. So I sort of know how this feels. Anyways, nice work. I loved it.

    Piper
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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