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    dots Submission Name: Happy Birthday Liz R.I.Pdots
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    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       This is a birthday poem for Liz Army. A person I have known almost all my life who died of cancer. Her mother now takes care of her 2 daughters. She would have been 30 on july 3rd 2006.


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    dotsHappy Birthday Liz R.I.Pdots
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    Happy Birthday liz
    the one I've known all my life
    even though your not here now
    I know things are alright

    I'm sure your sitting back now
    with no tears or fright
    right there by gods side
    smiling with such delight

    Such a wonderful mother you have
    your kids will be protected
    I've known her for a long time
    and she's highly recommended

    so enjoy your time in heaven
    we will soon meet face to face
    and have a happy birthday
    with much love and grace




    Submitted on 2006-07-04 01:14:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's very sweet of you. It felt like you were not only wishing her the best but also reassuring her that things are okay down here so she can relax. I like that. Not so mournful as most... more of a note filled with warm wishes for a friend who's passed.
    I only saw one error: in the first two stanzas when you use "your" it should be "you're" because its a short word for "you are." The usage of "your" in the last two stanzas is right, though.
    Kudos on a heartwarming birthday wish.
    Jessica
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by parabola | [ Reply to This ]


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