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    dots Submission Name: no namedots

    Author: dryken
    ASL Info:    30/m/OH
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 24/23/28
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsno namedots

    the foul chill of heart ache grips me. pilling me into the darkness consuming me.
    my soul cannot breath so heavy is the sarrow upon my heart, for i am empty void of the nourishment that once made me whole.
    now i am but a hallow corpse
    praying for something now long lost to me.
    they say one mans junk is another mans treasure.
    if only i would have found her first, i could have sheilded her from the pain that drove her from me.
    the agony that slowly drives us to madness.
    for iam brocken like a man who cannot take in his own air.
    yet i choose not to.
    for the eternal torment in the firey prisons of hell seem little to my acheing.
    death find me swift and end my soft memories that shatter the soul

    Submitted on 2006-07-04 02:02:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      for a name might try Final Thoughts, or not watevr, its good.
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by His goth child | [ Reply to This ]

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