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    dots Submission Name: Premature Destructiodots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPremature Destructiodots
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    Fighting off the world leaving our minds upon a window-pane.
    Brain dead and living Life in feign.
    Seeking something stronger than the hate.
    Delusions flood your altered mental state.
    Watching the mistakes through eyes of gray.
    Everythingís distorted eventually falling from decay.
    Fall for hollow lies we are so naÔve.
    Is it that we fall or do we want something to believe.
    Meddlesome scriptors telling us what is true.
    Standing in bewildered manner we fortunate few.
    We stand up and want to fight back.
    The futureís fading turning to pitch black.
    Avarice is running the corporate corruption.
    Itís slowly leading the world to premature destruction.




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