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    dots Submission Name: my body dropsdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 714
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 779



    Description:
       this is letting you all know...that I have a few people in mind that I am either going to be with...or be with nobody for a long time...I know it doesn't state that very well...but its there


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    dotsmy body dropsdots
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    I surround myself with people that love me/
    yet I"m so alone, so I feel that I"m nothing/
    and I would do anything/
    to feel as if I"m breathing/
    just once more/
    as I"m standing waiting for her to open her door/
    although its been a while since I"ve felt such a feeling/
    its so near that it hurts, my heart is sealing/
    calloused from beatings endured/
    welded shut, but so many people already entered/
    so the pain won't stop/
    untill my body finally drops/
    but they say that its better/
    to have loved and lost, but wheather/
    I choose to believe/
    I still die decieved/
    so what am I to do/
    the fact remains that I"m through/




    Submitted on 2006-07-04 19:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like rthis alot. thanks for inviting me to read it. its a really good piece. well written. some parts are a little patchy but overall its a great piece and you are a great writer. keep posting
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, u described this feeling nicely, i have just got out of this so i know wot ur goin through,
    keep em cummin babe
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      This is my absolute fav one of urs overall. I pretty much can relate to this one more than any other one of urs. I know what it feels to have people in that already there and will never leave. Those are the people that have the posibility to hurt u the most. For me they pretty much are the only ones who can. Like u and Meg. Well some other person I choose not to mention. Good write. Keep it up. Love ya.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like it bunches...cant wait to read more!!

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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