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    dots Submission Name: Hand of Matchesdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHand of Matchesdots
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    hand of matches
    via a viaduct
    south side entrance
    city limits of love
    the fingers touch
    softer than breath
    blown through a
    golden gateway
    sirens sounding
    racing across
    an aloneness
    bridge to her core
    awakened and
    alive with fire
    desire's inferno
    blows the embers
    and the flames lick
    as tongues of fire
    along her sides
    around the hills
    through the valleys
    and burning bush
    entering holy ground
    take off your shoes
    no fire fighting
    allowed today




    Submitted on 2006-07-04 20:36:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man, I was reaching for the extinguisher...lol. Very nicely done, you instill the fire and passion ans wanting without any real reference to carnal things, a neat trick.

    Title...I don't know...how about "arsonist" ? lol "Firebug?" lol sorry just playin'

    Sexual and sensuous with class, extra good stuff.

    be happy

    graeme
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Chrystine
    This write to me reflects upon the match being the spark that started war
    I may be wrong here but that is the sentiment I get
    You worded this very well as you do all your writes
    I will be returning home to New Jersey soon to be with my Mother
    I am actually quite sad I never had the chance to meet you
    In the future I will be visiting my Dad and I will be sure to let you know when
    If you can Chrystine can you please pm me and e mail addy where I may contact you if we lose touch
    Keep the California soirit alive Chrystine
    There is a lot of good poetry in Cali and I consider you one of the better poets
    I will do my best to spark a fire (no pun intended) lol
    in New Jersey
    Please keep in touch
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo, damn Chrys, this is too hot!! This is like the firey side of passion, and I love that you compared it to fire, because fire is passion! I love the different imagery you used to describe the person having sex here, and the whole poem was a really great metaphor, and it was like I was reading two stories in one. This really was an amazing write, and I am glad that you found the time to write it, and that your muse hasn't let you down. Amazing job.
    Peace, love, light, euphoria,
    Aya*
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to read it twice to get what you were saying, but by george I got it. lol. What a way to explain causual sex and saying screw what is right or wrong. I loved the image of a big city fire and how it seems like strangers. I love the part about holy ground. As to say, now that they are about to have sex, show respect and trend lightly. Then the ending was great, don't bother to fight the feeling...have you been reading my old diaries? lol. great work Chyrstine!

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a wonderful poem. i love the images here and the ending w3ith the burning bush was great. nothing i would change here; you should submit this to a publication.

    peace,

    joe
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Whew! IT's getting hot in here!

    Very, very nicely done! Sensual without being crass, visual without being pornographic, emotive without screaming in our faces!

    I must go take a cold shower now!

    Nicely done!

    Chell
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]


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