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    dots Submission Name: Rise and Shinedots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1107
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    Description:
       Just something that came up in coversation with a friend about the bright white blinding light of the sun.


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    dotsRise and Shinedots
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    And there it lies, beyond those shadows,
    Fumbling beneath the quilt that was grey
    Wondering if it was time to light up the meadows
    Or take another quick shut eye.

    But the quilt, it became frayed
    From grey pretty fluffs to threadbare whites
    And so it rose, piercing into the shade
    Yawning, it brought about the day.




    Submitted on 2006-07-04 23:22:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful for such a little write it has a wonderful descriptive imagery. I can see the sun poking over the clouds and tinting the sky with tinges of yellow, blue, and green. I like how you talked about the sun yawning that's such an awesome creative way to put it.Wonderful Job.
    pEAcE
    Liz
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
      This right is very strong
    I too have a deep love for sunlight and light in general
    The sun is the most powerful instrument in this world
    The sun brings life to all living creatures
    Without it life and the World would be no more
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful for such a little write it has a wonderful descriptive imagery. I can see the sun poking over the clouds and tinting the sky with tinges of yellow, blue, and green. I like how you talked about the sun yawning that's such an awesome creative way to put it.Wonderful Job.
    pEAcE
    Liz
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]


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