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Author: Freespyryt554 ASL Info:    18/F/OR Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 46 /41 /30 Words: 93

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Under the harsh light of the street lamps That orange glare glinting off the windshields of the surrounding cars The night sounds drumming a beat, one that sounds exotic and new You take my hand and kiss it We're together Just you, and me Our shadows are so different Yours is tall and strong Mine short and weak They seperate, into two light layers... But whats this? In the orange light we see it The dark place in the shadow... Our hands, intwined, connect us We are no longer two We are one

Submitted on 2006-07-05 02:56:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I don't know what kind of comments you're looking for, and if you'll appreciate me saying this, but I think this is very cute! After I read it, I went "aww". I can imagine it and put myself inside it and it makes me feel giddy with love and happiness! ha ha But anyway, I love how it sets up being very serious and sets the scene which sometimes I find boring, but you're able to at the end make a connection with the reader by saying "But whats this?" and then suddenly all my guards came down for having this scene set-up and I thought, "Aw, that's cute!"

| Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by themonalisa | [ Reply to This ]

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