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    dots Submission Name: YESTERDAY'S RUBBLEdots
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    Author: junemarie
    ASL Info:    62,F, Port Richey, Fl.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 66/70/27
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1381
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1295



    Description:
       Just call me the heartbreak kid


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    dotsYESTERDAY'S RUBBLEdots
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    There's a place in my heart
    Its color is blue
    There's a space in my heart
    Where memories pour through.

    Memories of long ago
    And some that are quite new
    It doesn't matter which they are
    They all take me from you.

    For I can't believe you love me
    Though you often tell me so
    I wonder when you'll tire of it
    And turn from me and go.

    This broken place inside me
    Is bruised and battered sore
    But just like a prize contender
    I keep coming back for more.

    For no one can ever give me
    What I need from them the most
    Because I'm not someone that's real
    But the shadow of a lonely ghost.

    A ghost that dwells in lonely dreams
    Of shattered yesterdays
    Remembering all the loves she knew
    That turned and walked away.

    There isn't any love left
    Not even way down deep
    So, I'll just wrap my heart up
    And throw it on the garbage heap.

    'Cause that is where I truly belong
    I'm not worth anyones trouble
    I'm only but a heartbreak song
    Buried 'neath yesterdays rubble.




    Submitted on 2006-07-05 02:58:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very sad. I hope you still don't feel that way. I just thought to stop by and read your work. It sure has been awhile since I've stopped by on your page. I feel the self hate and regrets that pour thorugh each line. I sense the fear of rejection and the feeling of unworthiness. This was very deep and poignant. Your rhyming was good as was your flow. Good job, June Marie.


    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      ohhhhh this is sad!!! Thee is no greater love than self love and without it all others are seen through dark colored glasses..
    I like this alot... even though iam not a bg fan of rhyming.
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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