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    dots Submission Name: trapeddots

    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 823
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 600

       this is how i feal everyday of my life

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    I am tangled in a web of lies
    With a long journey ahead
    It can stop me at any point I go
    I must go on past them

    I am in a great mess
    It stops my path
    The battle of my life is the hardest
    When will it end?

    “Never” says a voice inside me
    “You will always have to battle life
    It is a never ending ride that you must take
    And then enjoy the end witch is death”

    No this can’t be
    I will not be beaten by this
    I will never give up never
    You will not beet me that easy

    Submitted on 2006-07-05 09:49:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude, you're almostas depressed as me! lol. Anyway, very good, keep writing more! I wanna read some stuff I'm bored! lol
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I really, really, really enjoyed reading that. It was very original and worth reading. I also liked how you managed to put quotations in it. I don't know what else to say. It was superb. I can't think of how to change it in anyway to make it better either. Great writing and continue writing great poems like this.
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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