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    dots Submission Name: testsdots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 651
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 257



    Description:
       this is a poem a girl called Abbie Jackson


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    dotstestsdots
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    Tests are the best,
    Better than all the rest,
    It comes from the heart,
    Every single little part.

    Now we have done,
    We can bath in the sun,
    I think it is cool,
    lets go home and shoot some pool.




    Submitted on 2006-07-05 09:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I must say its cute. Defently made me smile. I thank you have a nice flow and good wording but *there is always a but sorry* But I thankthe last part could be better. Mabye adding a few words or taking them out. I do beleave it is good but I thank it could be much better. *Smiles* If you like it leave it the way you want it but this is just my openion.
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by fallen_angl_2 | [ Reply to This ]
      din't care for lack of strong ending, ryhmes not efective, not strong point, point unseen, lack of rythym, lack of imagination.
    ps just my opinion, if u like it thats fine wit me.
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by His goth child | [ Reply to This ]


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