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Author: Say what?
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one of my friends went through this so i felt i needed to write about it...


I don't want to do this, i'm leaving, i'm out
you could make me stay that there's no doubt
you think it's ok, that your in control
I've seen it before that life a black hole
you'll never get it, not until it's too late
You don't understand, I've seen your fate
Soon you won't be able to stand
you will lye on the floor me holding your hand
your friends are all laughing as the hit the door
They say hey let's make him have just one more
I don't find it when "he's had too much"
All i have to say is was it worth that 10 bucks
You were so wasted you couldn't even see
I asked you to stop begging you please
I hoped and prayed in that waiting room
Now it's real dark, Man walks by with a broom
He says that it's time i should just leave
I said,"do you know, could you ask, how is he?"
He goes and he sets up his broom on the wall
He goes and he walks a few steps down the hall
He talks to the doctor for a moment or two
Then he walks toward me and tell me,"hey you
The doctors concerned but he says he'll be fine"
I think in my heas, "oh good the fault is all mine"
I never should have let him drink like my father
I really want to talk but i guess i won't bother
He'll never hear me he's still not too sober
Maybe he'll hear it if I say it over and over
I walk right up to him in the hospital bed
I lean right over and whisper next to his head
I say all the thing that i really need to say
"I am so sorry it all ended this way"

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