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    dots Submission Name: In Full Colordots

    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIn Full Colordots

    I stand here
    In full color
    Magnificence hiding
    The fact that I am dying
    Old pieces of me, fading
    Dropping slowly to the ground
    Some picked off
    By the winds of change
    Some snapping off
    With the weight of the frost
    The ones remaining
    Turning withered and brown
    A shriveled reminder
    Of former glory
    And here I stand
    Now barren and gray
    Shivering in winter chill
    A ghostly silhouette
    Against a frozen sky
    Yet underneath
    The green of life
    If one cuts deeply enough to look
    Rejuvenating over time
    Tender budding feelings forming
    In the springtime of emotions
    Soaking in rain and sunshine
    As the temperature warms
    Spreading tiny fingers of hope
    Toward the sky
    Wanting nothing more
    Than to bloom once again
    In full color

    Submitted on 2004-05-15 11:40:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Could this be a middle age crisis? Oh dear, if so you are only a child yet. Save it for an old age crisis. Here is what I loved:
    "Some picked off
    By the winds of change
    Some snapping off
    With the weight of the frost"
    I love the ck in picking and "snap" sounds, you can hear and feel things breaking away. Very nice.
    "Yet underneath
    The green of life
    If one cuts deeply enough to look"
    Yes! This could go beyond age to any difference between two people, couldn't it?
    "feelings, forming.
    Springtime, soaking, sunshine.
    temperature, tiny, toward."
    nice alliteration.
    What I didn't like:-0-(zip, nada, zilch)
    I very much enjoyed this, I'm a bit older than you but it expresses a lot of how I also feel about growing up.

    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      First I would have to say..
    i love the new pic of you, doesn't showcase your eyes as much, but hey when ur cute, you want to the whole to see, right?
    I'm having a silly moment.
    Nice pic tho.

    Very beautifully written..
    I love the way it progressed into a slow bloom...
    very very nice
    Nuttin but luv
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the sequence of your po'em. The shade changes are wonderful...
    The detailing within feels safe...Not sure why...that was a feeling I got inside.
    I enjoyed reading your po'em.
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      ooohhh!!! how gorgeous and beautiful! this is GREAT! it makes me think of an elderly person : remembering how they once were, and wishing again for it. (its amazing how we forget that we were all youthful once...). this is really inspiring and i cannot find even one thing i would change about it!
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]

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