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    dots Submission Name: rundots
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    Author: eowyn
    ASL Info:    18/f/australia
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 227/153/76
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 214
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 740



    Description:
       had tropuble getting into another relationship.


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    dotsrundots
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    A smile would sooth them,
    Ease their fears.
    No matter how hard I try
    It eludes me, how to smile.
    I can’t fool them now,
    I am hurting and can’t conceal it.
    I’ve gotten too lonely.
    I won’t have anyone.
    My heart was bruised too many times
    And now it is numb and dead.
    I won’t risk it. I have started to run.
    They want me to settle down
    And learn to be happy
    With someone new,
    To stop running away.
    I wish I could do everything that they want
    But no one can stop me now.
    Should they stop me, would they stop me?
    Could they stop me now?
    Will they stop me, who can stop me
    Running to the ends of the earth.




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      I have only been in one relationship, but I can understand that after a relationship, especially if you were hurt, how it would be very, very difficult to jump into anothedr, even if you technically want to. But you should never give up on love, on the fairytale. I did once...but you know what, I'm happy now. Don't give up on love...

    This is a good piece, short and sweet.
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by Scribbles1338 | [ Reply to This ]
      Eowyn, I must say, I like your style of writing. I really do. I enjoyed this piece a lot, as it seems to express a truth I don't know, as I haven't had this problem. But from reading this, I can see what you're feeling.

    I would be horribly afraid to get into any relationships after the one I'm in (assuming it ended, which I pray never happens). I would feel afraid that the next one would end too. I'd want to keep my heart safe from any more breaks. Though I haven't ever broken up with someone and had this problem, I've already preempted it and wrote a poem about this very thing. You should check it out. It's called The Walls of Jericho.

    Anyway, I really liked this. It was good. I can't see anything that needs to be changed or reworked. A fine job you've done here.

    Justin :)
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]



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