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    dots Submission Name: ** Another Worlddots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 788
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 478



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    dots** Another Worlddots
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    Lost in the world
    Of another being
    Wearing mini skirts
    And striped tube tops
    With little heals
    And big-hooped ear rings
    With large breasts
    And small waists
    Voluptuous bodies
    Stringed with the
    Latest fashion
    Acting as though
    We're better than
    Everyone else
    In a society were
    Everyone talks
    Exactly the same
    Where itís a shame
    To be any different.




    Submitted on 2006-07-06 07:42:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmmm I like the flow of it, it's like a stream of consiousness thang easy to read and easy to absorb. Good work
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Legandor | [ Reply to This ]
      Really interesting. I liked this poem, it had a really nice flow of words. The whole thing was good, but I really liked the bottom have of the poem. In a way I can relate to that.
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]
      I can realte to your thoughts. It was well written. It was a small poem with good thoughts behind it. The writing of this as a original work was ok. I could relate to your thoughts. They talked about a world that was unknown to you. This is what made the poem good to read.

    Keep it up!
    USGlen
    | Posted on 2006-07-06 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]


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