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    dots Submission Name: Return of the Stormdots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1181
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1615



    Description:
       Just a normal run of problems - and some my patented hot flow therapy to work it out.


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    dotsReturn of the Stormdots
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    At night,
    The Storm is the Dawnbringer -
    Right now,
    The Storm is this bomb singer -
    Tryin to make the peace linger
    In this kind mind of mine shackled by high fines,
    Rampant fear mongered and pills in white lines
    Itís a sign of the times,
    Iím stuck in vestibules,
    Cuz my doctor got no time to see the destitute.
    And if you donít take your meds they arresting you
    When you up against the wall and nothing left but to shoot!
    But no, I must maintain.
    Or else they stand to gain,
    One more black man locked up in iron chains
    Iíll never be sane
    And I think I donít want to be
    One more monkey shaking limbs of the money tree
    The situation? Canít you see how they punish me Ė
    Every time Iím denied the mere right of just running free?
    They look down and see faces,
    We look at assholes in their places
    Might as well be faceless
    Which for them is more basic
    Cuz weíre moved about in numbers
    SSN, ID, and ipís by the hundreds
    Is this really what we wanted?
    Were we ever consulted,
    As to whether we would work in life constantly insulted?
    Verbally assaulted
    When the creditors calling,
    But before they hang up: ďThereís a sale at the mall and
    Bring your whole gang upĒ
    Timeís changed what?
    Still no right to dignity Ė
    Even in a suit they see a young dumb pickanny
    But why do I care
    Or let it be iggin me
    Since I still like to blast my Rakim and Eric B.?




    Submitted on 2006-07-06 17:16:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The lines: "Iíll never be sane and I think I donít want to be; one more monkey shaking limbs of the money treeThe situation? Canít you see how they punish me Ė Every time Iím denied the mere right of just running free? They look down and see faces, We look at [censored]s in their places. Might as well be faceless which for them is more basic." was pure brilliance,

    Although some wording and grammar was slightly confusing I can presume that was intentional?

    Overall I loved this.

    - Mandolin
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by Mandolin | [ Reply to This ]


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