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    dots Submission Name: Virginity, poisoning of rosesdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I'm back after awhile....if youknow my work, this is another love-ish poem....written July 4th, 2006...it's a painful one...but I want your thoughts. Thank You


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    dotsVirginity, poisoning of rosesdots
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    I have this madness
    that I can not
    won't not
    live without
    So deep inside me that
    I'd hurt myself
    wide open to
    appease his lust for my
    pain/insanity
    So deep that I'd dance in nettles to see
    his sick smile
    So deep that I've carved
    his name on the inside of
    my throat
    so that the essence of my every breath
    will be of him/you
    So that everytime I swallow, I
    bring you deeper inside, and
    every word I speak will be of
    "we"...us
    I have this madness
    His
    is my madness
    From the very first inch
    inside
    to this dark cold lonliness
    in the corner of his bedroom mind
    Shivering in the shadowed thoughts of all
    those other women
    who came
    after I was
    infected
    who
    sit in my place and lap at
    his sweet sickness
    And here I am-
    Trapped inside my head
    Wrapped in withered roses
    Tapped on the shoulder and
    told to MOVE ASIDE
    move aside....
    "But he was my first..."
    I tell them
    "and..." feebley "I am sick with
    his madness"

    But they dont hear me.
    And I try to reach out for him
    and feel what was there the first time
    Before I became this madness
    before the roses were poisoned-
    and I sink deeper into then,
    while I shed a tear for

    now




    Submitted on 2006-07-06 23:35:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This is really good. I think I like the layout although it seems a bit forced in some parts but overall it fits the rythm pretty good. A nice fresh write. I especially liked this lines: "Before I became this madness
    before the roses were poisoned"
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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