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    dots Submission Name: Gonedots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 706
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 255



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    dotsGonedots
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    Silent
    Lifless motions
    SweetTurpatude
    Wishes Forgotton
    Words unheard
    Soul Disapears
    Writhed Life
    Torment Gone
    Love gone
    Nothing But
    Sad words
    And my
    Silent Valadiction




    Submitted on 2006-07-07 14:22:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love poems with broken up sentences and so I loved this. You did well using few words to mould this into something so powerful. You gave a vivid picture with the use of brilliant words, well done. If I were you, I would work on these lines:
    Nothing But
    Sad words
    And my


    They made me lose some of the mysterious feelings the rest of the poem gave.


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    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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