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What Else Is There?


Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Description:


Of course, thanks to 3 doors down. Don't want anyone to think I stole their words, beacause I didn't.


What Else Is There?



One more kiss or one more lie?

Everything falls on me.

I see real and make believe

but what's real for me?

I'm torn in between

who I am.

I turn my back on loving you,

how could this be a good thing?

But you're good for me,

and I need to see.

You don't know who I am;

You may love me,

but you don't.

Just let me go.

I can't escape these things.

When everything falls apart,

you'll be the only one who'll be there.

What else is there?




Submitted on 2006-07-07 20:01:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i gotta be honest i dont think its brilliant artistic poetry but what makes it great is how we can all relate :)
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
  you stole your most of your words from a three doors down song....without giving credit.

| Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by luvneverreturnd | [ Reply to This ]
  I like that you are a good writer keep it up
| Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by twinklebell69 | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah seriously veyr 3 doors down-ish..good write though, it was real, could use some sprucing, but overall still well done..

-Anya
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it....it uses some of the same phraes as three doors down....but they cant really say you stole anything...because it conveys a diffrent meaning....
| Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by schemingdevil22 | [ Reply to This ]
  This one is really good also. You like to write about love it appears, that's ok it's not a bad thing some of mine are also. Keep it up,


Jessica
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by jslbabygirl101 | [ Reply to This ]
  ok i think u gave credit to 3 doors down! u said it in ur description thing!! this is really good no matter who u stole it from borrowed it from or w/e!! and yes i agree with twinklebell69 u r a good writer!!
~akaila~
good job!
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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