Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Beginning of the end


Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1454
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 774



Description:




Beginning of the end



To seek refuge from my emotions, I seek solitude.

I'm better off alone
'Cause when solitary, to sadness I'm not prone.

I am made to suffer unending emotions
Emotions that are inseparable from the effect of love.

I don't know what love means anymore!
As i loved "somebody" truly
While she decieved me, and unsettled my core!

Despair leads to sadness and change...
I'm despair...and i've changed.
Loving her was a mistake and by my mistakes-
I'm always shamed!

My hunt for love begins and ends
As unworthy love binds and releases me.
I hunt love no more as
Love has forsaken me!




Submitted on 2006-07-08 05:38:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  This was very well written. Reading it I felt sorrow, pain, and loss. I know none of those are pleasent feelings. I'm sorry you have to feel them. Recently, I have been through this same situation, and I know how much it hurts. But I have a little ray of hope in finding true love once more. I hope you find yours as well. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

Always,
XE.L.MX
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow , i loved this poem i can relate to it like hell at the moment, but something i keep telling myself is that no matter how many times i get hurt im alive..i made it..im thankful for that..u can give up on love..but love will find you it always does u may be hurt again yes but. ask yourself this is a few weeks years even of hurting, crying feeling like ur dying. Is it worth to you an eternity of happiness? or do u want to give up and live like that forever
~ With Love Ashley
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by OscuraAmor | [ Reply to This ]
  This was an awseom poem. It showed a bunch of emotions but at the same time . . . . . it kinda stayed on topic. This was a great write.

~ Gotham Freak ~
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



109825