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Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 225
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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something hillariously stupid but still funny....


It was you on my mind, you on the walls
It was you everywhere.
I can’t remember you now
Blonde? Brunette? Did you even have hair?

Amazing how things changed, how I changed!
I used to smile before and now I can’t stop laughing.
‘Cause Jane, Susy, Fiona and all of them
Stay overnight and on my bed we do a little friction-dancing!

To you I use to say “I’ll call you at ten.”
Now I get numerous messages on my phone from girls
And, I don’t remember them!

These days when I’m walking down ‘Boulevard 69’
I think of you and how much I really loved you…
I remember you giving me the “can’t love you-let’s be friends” shi*.
Tables have turned, you feel lonely and solitarily you sit.

It all changed when I went to bed with your best friend;
She enjoyed it and spread word about my magic stick.
Since then all I did was sit around and they came and
Turned me into a college hottie from a soccer freak!

Word’s that you are telling people you had turned me down
Guess what, it has become the year’s best joke!
You turned your back on my true love and now
You’re and outcast, you’re friendless and
Jeez! You were even dumped by that nerdy bloke!

Submitted on 2006-07-08 05:41:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a great poem. I love the imagery in it.

This was my fave part:

It was you on my mind, you on the walls
It was you everywhere.
I can’t remember you now
Blonde? Brunette? Did you even have hair?

^ It is so true because it is what we all go through . . . . . . memories fading.

~ Gotham Freak ~

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| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]
  HAHAHAHAHAHA, that's ROADKILL!!! So, word spread about your magic stick, eh? And Boulevard 69? Somthing must have changed drastically... Tell me aboot it???
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]

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