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Author: Dispair
ASL Info:    28/m/qld
Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 15 /38 /35
Words: 82
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Where are you?
I search but you do not come
Love find me soon
For I am wasted without you
Abreast the beast of lonliness
Fallen angels to my side
Discomfort in my slumber
Hatred on my lips
For only a second hope rears its head
Fails to me upon my chase
Forgotten dreams to be my hearth
Ill taken to me
Like the mithril halls of my mind
Sliding between realities
Constant become
Faith gone from life
Faith gone

Submitted on 2006-07-08 06:10:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  What a sad but beautiful write. I really relate to this a lot, describes my life perfectly, cathartic to me. Thank You. Keep writing! shalini bridges
| Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]

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