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    dots Submission Name: Climbing a mosquedots

    Author: Duke Medhat
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    5.08 - 58/38/24
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Well, I can not stop attacking the dirty theocracy -especially the Islamic one- because we (the secularists) are suffering from it in Egypt.
    If someone want to know why; then read my poem "the true hell" first.

    NB: The ruling regime in Egypt is neither theocrat nor secular. It is moderate. But the society is theocrat and here come the problem.

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    dotsClimbing a mosquedots

    As I am climbing a mosque, I behold
    Blackness at the top
    I asked "what blackness to do here"
    On the top of mosque
    My eye was accused by my heart, till
    I reached the top
    Waves of blackness was covering the dome

    "O dark waves, for sure I know you"
    "O dark waves, for sure I hate you"
    "You are the waves of the theocracy"

    In a second, I cracked the dome
    Yes, I did. I cracked that dome
    Let dirty theocracy be poured
    Over blank heads of dirty theocrats

    Submitted on 2006-07-08 07:18:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      No better way (philosophically) to wake up the powers that be than to make them live their own beliefs. Only one suggestion, in the seventh line, "was" should probably be "were" as the plural of "waves". Otherwise I liked it just fine.
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by coyote | [ Reply to This ]

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