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    dots Submission Name: the boy i used to datedots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1402
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1627



    Description:
       Based on what I would call an excuse to why I can't be with the one I love. Things do change between people, but if you still feel the same way inside as you did when you were together, you can't say that too much has changed, it's still the same inside.

    (please don't comment on how i'm too young to love because i have heard it too many times before and unless you honestly know me, you can't say if it's the typical teenage "oh i think i'm in love" bullshit or not. thank you.)


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    dotsthe boy i used to datedots
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    verse 1:
    how many times
    do you have to say
    it's over
    before it really ends
    how many times
    are you goin' to say
    you don't love me
    till thers's truth
    in your words

    pre-chorus:
    how many times
    do you have to tell yourself
    that things have changed
    before you realize
    that inside, it's still the same

    chorus:
    you're still the boy i used to date
    and i'm still the girl who will wait
    wait for a chance to prove to you
    that this love you're feeling is real
    and it will never come to an end
    no matter how you convince yourself
    every feeling inside, hasn't changed

    verse 2:
    how many times
    do i have to cry
    till i'm done
    i am sick of cryin'
    how many times
    will i speak my mind
    and say the words
    i don't mean
    i wonder

    pre-chorus

    chorus

    verse 3:
    things have changed
    but it's still the same
    deep inside
    that's where you try to hide
    but i know
    that you're just foolin'
    them and yourself
    why are you
    so afraid?

    pre-chorus

    chorus

    coda:
    how many times
    do you have to tell yourself
    that things have changed
    before you realize
    that inside it's still the same
    you're still the boy i used to date




    Submitted on 2006-07-08 12:56:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed the poem "The Boy I Use To Date" very much and I really liked the message very much. I thought it was sincere. Now I have a big question. I am a singer and am currently purssuring my dream, my passion to sing love songs, heartbreak, you know those types. Now If I were to use your lyrics with your consent of course I would love to be able to do that.....its truly up to you. I loved these lyrics and I found the message in them really poitive....so please get back with me to let me know. For now its going on my faves. k? oh and if I were to use your lyrics in my cd they would be recongnized as yours.....thank you an dplease write back.

    Sincerly,
    Christina
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      "how many times
    will i speak my mind
    and say the words
    i don't mean"

    I love that.

    In my opinion, you're never too young to love. I hate it when they say that. A lot of people mistake certain feelings for love, but that happens at every age. So who's to say how you feel?
    Well.. you are. And I think you said it wonderfully here.

    "Things do change between people, but if you still feel the same way inside as you did when you were together, you can't say that too much has changed, it's still the same inside."

    That couldn't be more true. You described it perfectly.

    I can give you nothing but compliments.

    Shit. Appearantly, I have spyware. lol I have to go.

    Great job
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      It's nice to see something of yours back on here Kriss! I was pumped to read this!! I really like this one!!! It flowed perfectly and was just simply amazing. I'm not sure how many of your writes I actually tried (key word being tried) to find something to criticize or if I did try but this one is perfect.


    "you're still the boy i used to date
    and i'm still the girl who will wait"


    That was my favorite part out of the whole thing. It pretty much says your dedication here too. But before I say anything about what I think of you two, I need to know whats going on before I speak. Anyways great job and I hope to hear from you soon!!!


    Brenna
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]


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