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Amazed


Author: painofthanatos
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for Kyle.
(if you're really curious...you can read my journal)


Amazed



When I first met you I was constantly Amazed...

Amazed at how big my smile grew when I saw you
Amazed at how well we fit in each others arms
Amazed at how good of a listener you were
Amazed at how all those silly love songs suddenly made sense
Amazed at how, in my blondest moments, I never felt stupid around you

And even now, you've still got me amazed

Amazed at how many pieces my heart broke into
Amazed at how my eyes are STILL finding tears to cry
Amazed at how you're too scared to return my calls
Amazed at how many hours I've spent in bed blaring depressing country music
Amazed at how you managed to make me feel more stupid then I have felt in my entire life
Amazed at how much you've managed to disappoint me

Amazed at how you've turned my dream come true into a living nightmare...




Submitted on 2006-07-08 16:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, I've been reading all your poetry and it's really great! I can relate to almost every poem!
I like this poem a lot because it starts so happy and cheerful and then it takes a sudden turn, and it's not! It seems like you have other work like that, and it's good because it really draws me in and gets my attention.
Also, this piece seems really casual and not so deep with hidden meanings, which I like because your emotions and your thoughts are right here ... and when I personally write stuff like that it seems more fun and liberating because I'm not constructing something deep and trying to think of some profound rhyme...
Anyways, your work is fantastic!
| Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by themonalisa | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very good poem. I love the repitition of the word AMAZED. Keep up the good work. Also very good emotion shown.

R.bayden
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]


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