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    dots Submission Name: now i realisedots

    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 869
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsnow i realisedots

    how could you take all of my dreams away,
    after all that i told you,
    and shredded up my heart like paper,
    after all that we've been through.

    i thought i could confide in you,
    tell you all there was to say,
    but now i realise,
    that it wasnt to work out that way.

    i trusted you with secrets,
    gave you all that i had,
    but if you realy did love me,
    then why does it feel so bad.

    i thought i could confide in you,
    tell you all there was to say,
    but now i realise,
    that it wasnt to work out that way,

    i thought you were the one,
    but you let me down,
    im so twisted now,
    that i cant turn around,
    gave you all i had to offer,
    but you gave it to another,
    o how could you break me like this?

    i thought i could confide in you,
    tell you all there was to say,
    but now i realise,
    that you were never to stay.....

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      well this poem touched me alot you described everything very very well, it brought back those feelings I felt with my first love, i call this poem a perfect mixture of feeling and emotion a perfect poem, cause it lets you think and visulize on the writers situation along with, your own point of view. very very much awesome
    | Posted on 2008-02-26 00:00:00 | by Mirado | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, love dont give up ..so one guy is a complete [censored]....you will find someone. i have prolly said this way to much and it is over rated but the hardest thing about this world is to live in it. We love we lose, we love we lose...but love the most important love of all is that of ur friends and u will never lose that. The right man will come just hold tight keep your chin up. Oh and i LOVED the poem its wonderfully written expressed how i feel. keep writeing i look forward to reading more.
    ~ All The Love In The World Ashley
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by OscuraAmor | [ Reply to This ]
      yo' this is hot..nice hook...I'm goin through the same stuff right now...
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, so I find it fairly easy to relate to this, though, after a very tense two hours, it was avoided, and I'm still with my girlfriend. But, I think you really captured a lot of what was racing through my head at the time, all the questions, thinking, "but you said forever," and stuff like that. Yeah, this is pretty gut wrenching. *sigh* I wish people never got hurt by love. It's just so painful, so unfair, so... stupid. Yeah. I'm sorry girl--hope things are going okay for you now.

    Good poem, don't know if I said that or not yet.

    Justin :)
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]

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