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Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 43
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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An old emo poem I wrote in like the sixth grade. But I like it still. So if you like it too or would like to comment, then please do. Tell me what ya think of it. :)


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The beautiful sky
is a dark mess
the grass that was once green
is now covered with mud
the white clouds
are now gray
the great person you used to be
is gone
and my once full heart
is now empty and black




Submitted on 2006-07-08 18:50:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short, simple, and straight forward. I like it! One thought that came up while I was reading it, word wise, was replacing "gone" with "no more." On the emotional level, I hope this never NEVER happens to anybody, but if ever it does: they choose for how long their heart shall be blackened. I know that if mine ever was, I'd probably never get over it... not really...

Outlaw
| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and simple. I agree with Outlaw. Yet...the pathetic fallacy used in this was so great. The earth agreeing in your pain. *Shakes head* You used it in a beautiful way.



Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read!
<3BCute
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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