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    dots Submission Name: Dignity of Mandots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1038
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       just a lil sumtin to get back in the groove


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    dotsDignity of Mandots
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    Started writtin when i was 14 had a dream
    Of this crop i wanted to be the cream
    Lyrical greatnest writtin on this little shy-boy face
    It was obvious i didn't have to eat to get my grace
    Didn't have to go to church to be forgiven
    My doomed prophosies have already been written
    So the nick name me the neo-nostradamus
    Using my pen as he used his stylus
    Stylelized lyrics read to you as a journel
    A testament of time because my lyrics stay eternal
    But hes not a thug like the rest man his shit is gay
    But a man only curses when he has nothing to say
    In a blink of an eye my life was just washed away
    Im on 15 But ya'll comparin me to Jay
    But the question is where do i stand
    On this fine line on the dignity of man
    Am i evil or just ignorant to my misdoings
    Don't know wether my God is renewing
    Renewing my access card into heaven
    Rising from opertion as if my soul was leaven
    But dont get my wrong i did i little dirt in my life
    Dedicated to my poetry as if it were my wife
    So will i take the elevator to heaven or fall to the hells
    This is my life i have nothing else to tell
    ~1~




    Submitted on 2006-07-08 20:48:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi bubz, i loved this, the flow was tight, this one grabbed me and pulled me in to ur life, if that made any sence, anywayz its gonna be added to ma favz, you def back in ur groove and im glad u r,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      hi bubz, i loved this, the flow was tight, this one grabbed me and pulled me in to ur life, if that made any sence, anywayz its gonna be added to ma favz, you def back in ur groove and im glad u r,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      hi bubz, i loved this, the flow was tight, this one grabbed me and pulled me in to ur life, if that made any sence, anywayz its gonna be added to ma favz, you def back in ur groove and im glad u r,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      yea this one is good. so i'm adding it to my favs. It grabbed my attention and kept it which is good cause i usually have a short attention span. lol.

    Lady D
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      Good read

    rhymes were were good

    and ya worded them nicely

    never got boring or too slow.

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hallelujah! This was very good. it was short, but packed a poweful lyrical punch. I loved the way you put your heart on the line, baring your sloul so we see your mind and heart. I loved the woridng and the flow. I feel you are at that crossroads and that you are defining the man you are and aspiring to the man you wish to be. This is a fav!

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This was suprisingly good. I didn't expect it to be, but that shows how first impressions can be wrong. :D I can't say that I have any constructive critism. I don't think you should change anything. I really like the rawness of this. It feels like you were just pouring your soul out through the poetry. Great Job.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      yo' this is nice, I"m feelin this, I guess its kind of a flow about you... the style was different than what it usually is...iono what about it is different than everything else butj....
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      Didn't have to go to church to be forgiven
    My doomed prophosies have already been written

    Stylelized lyrics read to you as a journel
    A testament of time because my lyrics stay eternal

    so i guess ur not worthless after all. this [censored] was pretty good. a lot more raw then the what i used to write but i've started to censor myself a lot less. pretty deep [censored]. i guess it's good enough to go on my fave list
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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