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    dots Submission Name: When He's Gonedots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       when you can't get over how much ur investing and how much ur getting back in a relationship


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    dotsWhen He's Gonedots
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    He was a poem and she never read it
    He was a love song and she never heard it
    He was a present and she never opened it
    He was her soul but she wasnít bothered

    He was the cry that evoked no sympathy
    He was the laughter that bore no joy
    He was in love and he was for granted
    Now that heís gone she canít forget it.




    Submitted on 2006-07-08 23:37:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm i think it like this, give me a second....


    yah i like this it very interesting to read. mostly because of the style. and how it flows and follows a patern.

    liked the idea and the emotional ground it was written. good write id have to say...

    another thing, i can realte which is good. and if i can realte of course others can to.

    keep writting!!
    xox
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]


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