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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    living lives of sensitivity
    where you could paint in the morning
    in front of windows overlookings the edges of life
    i could wake up later
    and drink coffee
    and watch you without having to say "good morning"
    and walk behind you
    and twist my fingers in your hair
    and whisper nothing but mean everything
    cause you've got the face for understanding

    we could listen to music on a couch
    with you stretched out and me curled up beside you
    with the smell of vanilla mixed with the smell of my hair(which always smells the same)
    and you could run
    and i could....
    watch
    and we could be happy
    i might be able to make you happy

    we could live by water, and swim when its cold
    and make spears out of bamboo for no reason
    and share clothes, and hold hands
    and swordfight
    cept i cant swordfight

    we could draw and we could listen
    and i could live in a house full of light
    and not worry about you not loving me
    i could write something for you
    and you could understand it
    and we could have a song
    and we could have a future




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      I'm going to try this one more time... (Now Myspace is being retarded ... so I'll say it hear. You'll probably check this before Myspace anyway, ;) Whatever.... delete it if you want since it's not a real comment)

    Hey Jack
    I don't know if you recieved my message on AIM or not today, so I'll just make sure. Last night after I got back online and said Hey, the internet went down. I wanted to make sure that it didn't seem like I had hung up on you or anything like that.
    I'll be in Maryland for about a week for an anime convention, Otokon, that Jay is bring me to. That's going to be a really long drive... like 24 hours or something near it. I still find it funny. I had no intention on going, but Jay didn't want to drive the whole way by himself, so he's vouching forward 50 bucks to pay my ticket into the place just so he doesn't have to drive byhimself. Also funny... because my parents still don't know that I'm going to be gone. I'll leave a note or something saying that I'm going to be staying at Jones' new house for a week or so. Doubt they'll have much say in it when I'm gone by the time they read it.
    Hey, maybe when I get back home I could bike over again? I'm better at it and all that good stuff now, so it would be more fun. I've been trying to keep in better shape and I've been biking about 5 miles a days around the neighborhood incase I'm invited over again, I found my old water bottle(twice as big, twice as much water, barely fits in the bottle holder on my bike)... Well, if you think that's cool or whatever, let me know.
    ....yay.... done....again. Sorry, this is the third time that I've typed this...(I liked the second draft the most) Every time I tried to send it, the MySpace people had a problem and it all went away.... grrr...
    First time I was just being happy, second I was trying to race to the finish so I would be done and get to go to the bathroom before Jay took his shower, and now I'm just taking my time... Because he's going to be in there a long time... the damn perv.
    Oh well... hope tol talk or type to you later
    Jeremy
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Last_Petal | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this is beautiful. I especially love this:

    could wake up later
    and drink coffee
    and watch you without having to say "good morning"
    and walk behind you
    and twist my fingers in your hair
    and whisper nothing but mean everything
    cause you've got the face for understanding


    And this:

    we could listen to music on a couch
    with you stretched out and me curled up beside you
    with the smell of vanilla mixed with the smell of my hair(which always smells the same)
    and you could run
    and i could....
    watch
    and we could be happy
    i might be able to make you happy


    I love the way you have described the simplest of things. You don't understand the beauty in these tiny moments, until you've lost the option to do these things, and you look back on it. This is a beautiful piece of writing, and I only hope that you get these things that you SHOULD have.
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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