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    dots Submission Name: FRIEND AND NOTHING MOREdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
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    dotsFRIEND AND NOTHING MOREdots
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    Let it happen once before,
    It will not happen any more:
    Did you really think that I was such a bore?
    My heart wasn’t yours to take,
    You see, it's really for my sake
    That I must not let it happen any more-
    Was it so hard to understand,
    All I asked for was a friend
    And nothing more…


    Writing letters, making plans,
    Was I boy, or was I man?
    Now I wish the sea would roll onto the sand…
    For, if a lesson's to be learnt,
    This boy just got his fingers burnt-
    But he'll forget you if he must, and if he can-
    For he'd rather be alone,
    Than risk you spit upon
    His outstretched hand…




    Submitted on 2006-07-09 14:05:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In case anyone is interested, this is the link to the song:

    http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7442203
    | Posted on 2010-01-07 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the words you used, but I think it could be a bit longer. I liked the part about lessons being learned, and the boy burning his hand. Good write.
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by KatieHomicide | [ Reply to This ]


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