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    dots Submission Name: MAKE MY DAY ( PETER GOETHES BACK)dots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 896
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    Description:
       This one was written many years ago upon reading a piece in the newspaper about a young man, Peter Goethe (?) who was regularly mugged and bullied by hoodlums on the subway... and one day he snapped, got himself a pistol and shot a couple of the hoods while they were trying to mug him again on the subway....

    Inside many of us there lives a Peter Goethe waiting to be unleashed...


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    dotsMAKE MY DAY ( PETER GOETHES BACK)dots
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    Go ahead, A**hole,
    Make my day,
    You shoot your mouth,
    And I'll blow your ass away,
    Give it some colour-
    Maybe red, or black and blue
    And the next piece of brainless graffiti
    On this subway could be you…




    Submitted on 2006-07-09 14:14:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a real good write
    We in New York had the first subway vigalante Bernard Goetz
    I can understand how a man can snap under these situations
    It seems like socirty lays a blind eye to mass transportation
    I mean think about it
    Do you ever see Policeman riding a subway train with you or on a train or bus
    We as Humans need more protection from the higher ups in socirty to prevent people from snapping like this
    Excellent and very informing write
    God Bless
    Ron

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    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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