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    dots Submission Name: Charlatandots
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    Author: Rastine Aristat
    ASL Info:    19/Male/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 125/62/31
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Bytes: 899



    Description:
       I think that this describes...well, everybody in a way, though there are some specific people I had in mind when I wrote it. I've had this running through my head all day, so it's good to write it. as always, I prefer that you be honest than being kind.


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    dotsCharlatandots
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    Charlatan - Pretender
    Hiding yourself in a blizzard,
    Each flake of snow a new lie,
    All to keep the world at bay.
    Within the flurry of your words
    You claim sanctuary,
    From those who could betray you.

    Charlatan - deceiver
    Your life’s become a jewel,
    With a thousand perfect facets.
    Drawing in those you hid from,
    They’re charmed by your allure
    But no matter who looks,
    Nobody sees the same side
    Only a shimmer of who you are shines through,
    To show you’re still there.

    Charlatan - Believer
    You’ve spent too much time,
    As the fun house mirrors,
    You are your wonderland,
    A subdued god,
    subjected to your own wiles,
    Tell me truly,
    How does it feel,
    To dance for your audience,
    A puppet to your own lies?




    Submitted on 2006-07-10 04:46:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      um...reading this...i would have to agree with you...this could pertain to everyone..in one way or another..i guess it just depends..

    but right now, i've applied it to myself. as of lately i've been having an identity crisis. i feel like that jewel, like that puppet, i feel like i am never TRULY myself around certain people. sometimes i feel like i have to put on a show for them to make them like me. ...and then i hate myself for it. ...but then i TRY to be myself. and i just dont know how. i dont know if i've lost myself in all the lies, and i cant find my way out of the maze i've created for myself to clarity...or if i was lost all along. ...or if these lies, and conformities are in actuality WHAT and WHO i really am...i really dont know...

    but i really liked this a lot. ...i loved the part about the jewel. GREAT metaphor...wonderfully thought out and written. i also really liked the last two lines....great closing lines. :-)

    i'm going to add this to my favorites!!
    <3
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]
      wow....harsh but wonderful. Truthfull enough to scar. But beautifully strange in the willingness to be so honest. Strong vocab....as always. I think charlatan is a little bit strange to use for this though. it means a false expert....like a fraudulant doctor. But maybe you meant that everyone in life is a false expert. Like everyone is claiming to be an expert at something (i that they are living in a way that makes them original) that they aren't. But who am I to say. I really like this and you are right. this could be anyone. I have been told that I am like this several times....and that is not what I want to be. That causes confusion.
    I think that I like these lines best
    "They’re charmed by your allure
    But no matter who looks,
    Nobody sees the same side
    Only a shimmer of who you are shines through,
    To show you’re still there."
    because once you start lying about yourself to hide you are never who you truly were before. you never truly shine like a fake diamond or a plastic bauble that was supposed to be glass.
    anyway
    thanks for the read. I enjoyed it.
    bri
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! The last stanza was a kicker, and wow, that's just an amzing line. I love it, wow, can I like totally keep this, and like write it somewhere, with appropriate cridit given of course. I have no clue who Charlatan is, and I hope this doesn't give away my sheer ignorance of any important historical fact. I also loved the stanza about the diamonds, and everyone saw a different one, but never the whole this, but I swear my favorite lines were, "Tell me truly,
    How does it feel,
    To dance for your audience,
    A puppet to your own lies?"
    That's an amazing line to me, becaise I think that I do that sometimes, lie to myself, but I try not to, or tey to notice when I'm doing it and fix it. Anyways, this write was amazing, and made my morning, so thank you for this. Amazing job.
    Walk in Love and Light,
    Aya*
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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