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    dots Submission Name: Myself - Vanisheddots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 627
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    Bytes: 663



    Description:
       This was written a few days ago... It came to me because I feel like I am having to act like a totally different person to be happy. Things aren't so gloomy today though, so I rearranged this a little and decided to post it.


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    dotsMyself - Vanisheddots
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    I live a life of regret and shame,
    And pray to wake with a different name.

    To transform myself from every view,
    And hope that what I become pleases you.

    To wear a smile so ugly and fake,
    And wonder what this lie will make.

    To walk with you along life's road,
    And wonder what the next turn holds.

    To be myself and simply perish,
    Or be another person you could cherish.

    To remember our love as it was before,
    And wonder if acting will bring us more.

    Can I be myself and keep your heart?
    Or will being myself rip us apart?




    Submitted on 2006-07-10 14:25:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very well written poem, but also very sad , I know you said it's not that way now, and I believe you but I just wanted to say that those people who will not accept as you are are not really your friends . And remember that God will accept you just as you are.

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      aww this is soo sad!! i used to feel like that! like "if i act like myself would they like me"? and now im like i dont even care cuz if someone doesnt accept you for you then thats a sign that your not supposed to be with that person. It easier said than done. One of those things that you just have to do, learn and grow from. Anyway good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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