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Better days

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this is posted as sunshine on my shoulder, just wanted to see about the title and the spacing.

Better days

Sunshine on my shoulders
Burdens in the field
Clouds carry worries away
Or entertain us with shapes
of elephants.
And rocking chairs?
They take you to paradise.
Kisses french ones, soft, gentle ones
and of course chocolate ones
are the band aides
to heal each wound we get.
Gas is once again
1 dollar and 50 cents.
For super and premium.
Kids sell lemonades
on hot summer afternoons
for neighbors.
Snow days
still mean days off to play
There is joy in every corner.
and in every reflection on a lake.
When we vote,
it matters
even when we abstain
from Dick and Bush
The sun shines on your shoulders
and burdens lay in the field.

Submitted on 2006-07-10 16:57:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well I have to say that I like this. Big Suprise. :D You wouldn't think by reading the beginning that it would end the way it does. Very Nostalgic. I wish gas was once again $1.50. I would do almost anything for that. This was very eloquently worded, and I share your views. Good job. I think I like this structure better than the other way.
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
  oOo. I really like this. Nice favorite part was..

Kisses french ones, soft, gentle ones
and of course chocolate ones
are the band aides
to heal each wound we get.

I like the title and the spacing. Nothing to worry about there. This makes me miss the days when I was a kid and had nothing to worry about...nice write....
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]

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