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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Want Anything To Do With Youdots
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    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1214
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1232



    Description:
       Intense poetry.


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    dotsI Don't Want Anything To Do With Youdots
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    It's been a long time now since I've looked at your eyes with pity
    You're different now, and its not something I admire
    There was a time when you were so down to Earth, we couldn't pull you up
    But you're so high on yourself and its hard to smother this fire

    Tell me you're fooling yourself
    Soon this greedy haze will subside
    How long before you one day realize
    All the while, you were taking yourself for a ride

    We're trying to help, we're doing you good
    Step down from this pedastal, do as you should
    But my words lose their meaning when you're fifty feet tall
    We will shatter this ego, break down these walls

    Undo what was done, unscrub what was clean
    Better you dirty than something obscene
    But this poison has spread, made its way to your brain
    There seems to be nothing to which you'll refrain

    So I guess you'll remain in your cynical ways
    Feeding your head to this undying craze
    And when you finally fall, may your fall shake the ground
    Bleeding with truths that will never be found




    Submitted on 2006-07-10 22:14:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The begining was my favourite part. This part:

    It's been a long time now since I've looked at your eyes with pity
    You're different now, and its not something I admire
    There was a time when you were so down to Earth, we couldn't pull you up
    But you're so high on yourself and its hard to smother this fire


    You did a great job writing it, and I though that this stanza added the most to this poem. . . . . . . overall . . . . . . this poem was great.

    ~ G Freak ~

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    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]
      intense poetry is right.
    i really like this. it flows.
    and makes sense.
    and i can relate to it.
    and the fact that your username Guernica is a song by one of my favorite bands makes your stuff better.
    im not sure how. but it does.
    :]
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by fbeat | [ Reply to This ]


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