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    dots Submission Name: Be A Part Of My Lifedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       I am feeling very distant from my mom, and when I think of her, I think of my teen years, when things got so bad between us. Things will never be the same for us, and I know that, but I can't help but think of what it would be like to have a real relationship with my Mother.


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    dotsBe A Part Of My Lifedots
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    All my life you've torn me down,
    Never telling me how proud you are.
    You never spoke a word of encouragement,
    The memories I have kept left me scarred.

    Everything I have done or will ever do,
    Will never be enough in your eyes.
    All you remember are the mistakes I've made.
    And the relationship we have just dies.

    All I wanted was to share my life with you,
    I needed you there on my side.
    Through all the pain and falling tears,
    I felt like we couldn't talk, and I had to hide.

    I needed more than a friend,
    My life has been rough withoutyou here.
    A daughter needs hugs, kisses, advice,
    A hand to hold and love to ward off fear.

    Could things have been different,
    If we had kept our love strong?
    Cant he past mistakes be repaired,
    When we've fought over them for so long?

    Tell me that you love me,
    Let me know you're proud once in a while.
    I want to learn and laugh together,
    Through the hardest of trials.

    I still need you Mommy,
    To love me through the years.
    Grow with me through our days,
    Laugh with me and dry my tears.




    Submitted on 2006-07-11 01:41:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this reminds me of a friends of mine relationship with her mother. It was very good you could feel the emotions from the writing. Very good
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Babykatty | [ Reply to This ]


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