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    dots Submission Name: You lost and never wondots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsYou lost and never wondots
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    When I looked into your eyes
    I could see there was only one
    Thing you wanted from me,
    You thought you could hide
    All your Lies
    But they appeared the day
    I let you have some
    You lost
    And never won,
    In my dreams
    It haunted me
    And your lies followed me
    And all you had said
    All you had done
    I kept telling myself
    You lost
    And never won
    But deep inside
    My heart couldn't lie
    It was torn from
    Your drugs
    And your lies
    I had promiesed myself before
    Enough is enough
    I won't let you in
    I won't open the door
    And when it happened again
    You came in
    Crying fake tears
    Saying I love you dear
    And once again you got some
    I cried myself to sleep that night
    Wondering if I was dumb
    As I kept the tears in
    Wondering if I had lost
    And he had won
    Since I had let him in
    To use me
    To fool me once again






    Submitted on 2006-07-11 11:54:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this it was very good, Keep up the writing
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Babykatty | [ Reply to This ]
      kool it was a good write i liked it alot. and yeah

    thats all i wanted to say


    keep up th good write



    fana
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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