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    dots Submission Name: A Drop?dots
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    Author: deafeningsilenc
    ASL Info:    18/Male/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 31/18/35
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1133
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 334



    Description:
       I was watching a drop of water, and I just imagined what it might have been thinking is it was about to fall. It also symbolises blood, the lifeforce, leaving the body, dead.


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    dotsA Drop?dots
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    It waits fearfully,
    Breath bated with a promise,
    Clasping desperately.
    Falling: a premise.

    Gravity embraces,
    Never to relinquish.
    Eternity defaces,
    No future to distinguish.

    A silent scream-
    Never heard.
    A broken dream,
    Now interred.




    Submitted on 2006-07-11 13:47:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool this reminded me of langston hughs.u got all of that from a drop of water.nice


    Da Grim Reaperesssss
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually you could think deeper and add more. Put yourself in the water drop and feel what it could be feeling.
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by EseanB | [ Reply to This ]
      I hear what yoursaying in this and its veryflowing, but a few forcedrhymes, all in all it ismy kind of poem. GoodJob,

    P.S. i intentionally take a spaceout of my words its how i write, and i lovethe picture!!!
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Deadly whisper | [ Reply to This ]
      kool it is really nice like the whole drop of water thing



    fana
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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