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    dots Submission Name: Love that Bleedsdots
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    Author: Faith_Disease
    ASL Info:    17/M
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 278/141/29
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 859
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    Description:
       I think I've been listening to too much Die Form. If you guys know me good, then you'll know that this isn't emo or vampires, but about something else... and its supposed to be taken literally.


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    dotsLove that Bleedsdots
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    Come and take a walk
    with me
    down the path of
    bleeding love.

    A gentle wind slithers
    across an open chest
    as flames of
    a forbidden thirst
    burn inside.
    The silken touch
    of your fingers as
    they caress my spine.
    The searing love of pain
    churning deep within.
    My pallid skin tenses
    with the soft licks
    of a loverís breath.
    I feel the caress
    of a sharpened edge,
    sense your tender desire.


    Draw this blade
    across my tainted skin.
    Make me suffer
    for you once again.
    Arouse the fire,
    burning in my veins.
    Let your razor
    draw me in.
    Let it bite
    into my soul.
    Let the pain and pleasure
    bind our hearts together
    My blood cries out for you.
    So take this knife
    and make me bleed for you.




    Submitted on 2006-07-11 15:15:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very nice. I was reminded of vampires near the end, "so take this knife and make me bleed for you". That was one of my favorite lines. I liked this, sorry that I don't have much to say, lol, peace.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      God, that's gorgeous.
    I don't even really know what to say.
    I love it.

    "Let the pain and pleasure
    bind our hearts together
    My blood cries out for you.
    So take this knife
    and make me bleed for you. "

    That is the best ending ever. Original too.
    Most things I've read lately that have anything to do with bleeding were all the same. But this is different. It's better.
    You have an amazing way with words.

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm I don't care what you don't want this to be darling, I love emo and this has definate emo potential:P lol. ok I'm going to be honest, as much as I'd like to say I know you well, I'm not totally sure what I was supposed to think of reading this one, if you were going for a metobolical sense I might have guessed that you weren't talking about a person at all but how much you love cutting. then again, I almost never know with you so for all i know this could have been about someone who you like/love and she (I hope it's a she ) either doesn't notice you in that way or doesn't feel the same and that makes you want to cut.....or if you like cutting that much you want to share that with her, honestly I know it's pretty "disturbing" of me but out of all the people I ever thought I liked there have been one or two (who also cut) that I wanted to sort of share that with, because for me anyway the actual act of cutting (like not talking about it but actually doing it) is pretty private and there have been a few people that I wanted to cut in front of && let them cut me, not because I hate them or anything but just the opposite, for some reason cutting means a lot to me when I do it for the right reasons and I think if I ever found someone that I wanted to be with for a while I'd want them to share that with me if they wanted to. I really can't explain it properly. but anyway yeah this write brought a lot of things to mind, that being a big one of them, and then the ending couldn't have been more perfect. it was just morbid enough to leave a lot to the imagination and I know that for most people it was probably more symbolic then anything but the literal meaning is kewl as hell to, like wanting that punishment I used to be really into (and I still kinda am *blushes*) Papa Roach and that kinda reminded me of the song "getting away with murder" I dunno if you've ever heard it but it made me think of a few lines from it. "somewhere beyond happiness and sadness, I need to calculate what creates my own madness, and I'm addicted to your punishment, and you're the master, and I am craving this disaster." I love those lines and this write was an original way to kinda bring that thought to mind. anyway yeah so (I could say more but I"m kinda in a hurry) loved it, all of it, supposedly that makes this a bad comment but aside from the format I can't think of anything I would change.
    love ya,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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