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    dots Submission Name: Soilder Alone Verse 2dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1037
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    Bytes: 975



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    dotsSoilder Alone Verse 2dots
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    After seeing the blood shead of mass murder i question
    And wonder about God and his intentions
    But I rather me take me before you take me
    Nigga bout to get locked up cause my lyrics is crazy
    Meat a nigga so close to death that the reaper is my bestfriend
    Lyrical ak fire into the air as a kill another weak rapper again
    Findin out the shit aint a game of checkers tryin to fight for the fame
    Dog eat dog world your a poodle no reason for blame
    Splittin open skulls and swollowin yout brain call me Hanible
    Bringing the pains of my rhymes like like imma rappin cannible
    Start the second holocaust enstate world was three
    Step to THESIS the wrong way and we will see
    Pen like an uzi word flyin like bullets out of a clip
    Hands tight on the mic you need to tighten your grip
    Fuck gimme some respect i wrote all dat shit gimme some repsect im tired of this shit
    ~1~




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      this one wasn't that good buddy. yeah that last line was a doozy. there were a couple of lines that i really liked though

    Pen like an uzi word flyin like bullets out of a clip
    Hands tight on the mic you need to tighten your grip

    yeah i was really feeling that
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Spoken word poem- yes? Normally I think people are too wordy and need to shorten their poems but in your case, I think you should lengthen it. I want more! It's very Saul Williamsesque. Passionate and soulful.

    Great job and Good luck!
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by nayre | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good, tha last bar was kinda off..but everything else was pretty crazy...
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      the ending was off but otha then that it was cool. When are you gonna write more anyways?? Let me stop over all it was iight i think you could've done betta.

    Lady D
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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