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    dots Submission Name: This New Worlddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThis New Worlddots
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    This new world--
    so rapid, so instant--
    has grown as thin and empty
    as a starving gazelle.






    Submitted on 2004-01-25 04:16:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There she goes again. Telling it all in her few words! You go girl!
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      haunting, this new world that i see is haunting, this is what i think of when i look at our world right now though, were starving it but its not a new world to me sadly. great stuff!
    | Posted on 2004-01-25 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      Good correlation with the dead gazelle and speed of the present. Nobody stops to enjoy nature now and just exhaust their resources for the culmination of empty 'success.' Since it's so small I would revise the first line to be more specific. Could have a used a description. It's a very strong write. Well done. You encompassed connections well in those 4 lines.
    | Posted on 2004-01-25 00:00:00 | by Webmaster | [ Reply to This ]


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