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My Angel, My Love


Author: James Reyna
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My Angel, My Love



My angel, my love
We live so far apart
My angel, sweet dove
You've flown away with my heart
Unaware of what you fly with on your wings
I lay here tonight
To replay those scenes,
Of joy we once had
When my soul was content
My heart was glad
But now it's rent
I smile now
While everyone is here
My angel come back
While my eyes tear





Submitted on 2006-07-11 21:18:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow I love your writing not every one can rhym in there poetry but youcan so nice job. I have read mmost of your writing now and I just wana tell you its some of the best ive read. and Ill have more of my writing up soon. your comments are verry sweet thankyou.
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
  Sorry, I haven't gotten a chance to check out your work.
This is a sweet..piece. I like its flow. You never know if it is true love it will fly back to you someday. Good work.
Love and Peace,
lynn
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
  Great stuff, the perfect portrait of a heartache. I like how you personified the dove and how she flew away with your heart on her wings. Very sad and somber, but what is love without pain? Nice job.

Jacob
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a good poem and has moved me very much! It reminds me of my own Love and it seems that you love somone who is far away from you at the moment that this was written. Wonderfully written and I loved. It has a very nice flowing sound to it and everything all seems to fit together. As if it was ment to written this exact way. What did you mean by rent though?
~LocketzVc
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by LocketzVC | [ Reply to This ]
   I know how it feels. I really like your style. Short and simple...well atleast the last 2 poems of yours have been..lol. But this is wonderful. Nicely written.
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  This is simply beautiful James and you really expressed emotion with this piece maybe you could have wrote the first part like this it would really sound better this way instead.


My angel, my love
We share life apart
My angel, sweet dove
You've flown away with my heart
Unaware of what you fly with on your wings

you did write it beautifully and I enjoyed reading this very much will add to my favs

Wilma



| Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, I really loved this. I really loved the first part when you said:

My angel, my love
We live life apart
My angel, sweet dove
You've flown away with my heart
Unaware of what you fly with on your wings

It was great..but what is reant? Anyway, you did a really good job on this.

Kris
| Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
  I've noticed that many of your poems are very similar. Understandable, as they all seem to be based on the same relationship the you clearly ponder quite a bit. I would suggest, though, to play with something different. Maybe more metaphorical, or even just write about something completely different.
Sometimes I come up with a line that seems to fit in no where, and I work on it until it becomes a poem. "Promises" was one such occurence, all I knew was I wanted to use the line "you wrote your promises across the sky".
It doesn't have much relation to my real life, but it got me away from my own rut of writing about the same thing over and over.
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one a lot
In this write you showed a wanting for a Love you Lost to return
You captured the emotion of a lost love exceptionally well
I get the feeling from your words this is not a complete loss
I can definately feel the Love
Never Give up until you are absolutely sure a Love has flown away as you say with the butterflys wimgs
Brilliant work!!!
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm!! Let's see! overall pretty good to tell you the truth, but it seems to me that the line "we live life apart" should be re-thought because the words live and life are a little too similar and I don't feel that they go well together. I'm sure the poem is much better when read aloud, many people complain about a piece not having any rhythm, but poetry is like drumming sometimes you can have polyrhythms that seem out of place but in reality do make sense and are in perfect Rhythm when played in the case of drums and read in the case of poetry.
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
  I lay here tonight
To replay those scenes,
Of joy we once had
When my soul was content
My heart was glad
But now it's reant

I like this part, it something that we've all done just sat and though about the good things but then it just makes us feel like 10x worst.
| Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Babykatty | [ Reply to This ]


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