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    dots Submission Name: do you remember?dots
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    Author: blackhart
    ASL Info:    26 male
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 65/63/56
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdo you remember?dots
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    do you remember los angeles?
    what about london?
    see the pale moon...
    it only feeds the obsession.
    theyll never know
    what it is we do... just the product.
    theyll never know the pride we have
    the responsibility or joy we take
    feel it tickling your senses
    quickening your soul
    the tingling in your fingers
    it coarses through your viens.

    the tools we use like enchanted instruments...
    singing the songs that fill eternity
    a romantic ideation
    the interlude of warmth
    so intimate
    so pure in every primal way.




    Submitted on 2006-07-11 22:41:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with dylan, im not so sure wot ur poem is about, i know its dark, is it that u get a kick out of other peoples pain?
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      The first two lines were the best part. I think it was really catchy. This poem was mysterious, I didn't quite understand it, but still, I thought it was good because it had that mysterious aspect.
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]


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