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    dots Submission Name: In God's Diarydots

    Author: D McDaniel
    ASL Info:    60/M/CT
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 266/222/62
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       In 1942, the world was in turmoil and God must have been very sad to see what was happening. In April of that same year, a woman gave birth to a baby girl who was unwanted. Perhaps it was because the father was off at war and the pressure was too great. But perhaps Audrey was just a gift from God.

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    dotsIn God's Diarydots

    One night up in Heaven high,
    God had a thought that made Him cry.

    And as the tears rolled down his cheek,
    the more He thought, the more He’d weep.

    As God stood up, He did not see,
    one tear had dropped, as if to flee.

    An Angel who was standing near,
    with trembling voice, did speak in fear.

    “Excuse me, Sir.” He started to speak.
    “But, I see a tear has left your cheek.”

    “Oh, so it has.” God answered He,
    “Please go and fetch it back for me.”

    From Heaven, things aren’t often dropped,
    so this one tear he’d have to stop.

    The Angel sped down towards the Earth
    to catch the tear before it’s birth.

    And as the teardrop he did find,
    still falling…God said “Never mind.”

    “Just let it go, and we will see,
    the life that this teardrop might be.”

    “And bring my diary, and I’ll write
    about what happened here tonight.”

    “But, before you do that, stop and see
    the mother of this child to be.”

    “Apologize for this mistake,
    she hadn’t planned this path to take.”

    “And take a moment to explain
    that a nice name might be Audrey Jane.”

    Dear diary…dropped a tear today…named it Audrey Jane…

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      wow i love this- i love how you make god human, and one of us.

    nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by nipole | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this!!! It's shows God as a human. It reminds me alot like the poem I wrote. Called "On the other side of the door dreams" Maybe I will change the title to God's Portrait. Yeah, find it and read it. I love this poem!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Solitary Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so beautiful.
    i clicked on it rather than Obsidian by mistake but wow... this is so beautiful... im so glad i stumbled across it. i dont know how i didnt before hand...

    this really is beautiful...

    when i was 3 i got a little brother and well i didnt want him... it was a really hard time for me and well... when i was sleeping i began to have these reoccuring dreams where i would have cups of tea with god.
    he makes a mean cup of tea might i add.
    anyways... we would have a cuppa and talk about whatever was going on in my life at that time...
    it has happened with most of the huge moments of my life... my parents separation and divorce... all their remarriages and divorcings again... deaths and a coupla ugly things thrown in there... always having cups of tea with god... talking about whats going on and all...

    so the picture you paint here of god isnt all that far away from how i see god and also how i see me too (though i was prolly born under very different circumstances...)
    you paint him as loving and tender and how nothing is accidental even when it kinda seems it is...

    i like the way you have the whole angel going to tell her not to stress and apologise and all... kinda a replay of mary and the immaculate conception... perhaps audrey too will bring some kind of miracle...

    when i first saw the name all i could think of was audrey hepburn (i love her to shreds!)

    anyways... this is completely beautiful and worthy of a much better comment... i shoulda left one like leftof_red... his really does say it all...
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, wow! This was so beautiful! I loved the way you explained the gift of this Audrey. I loved the viewpoint of God and the angel. I loved the way you show how God do mourn over the things we do and go through. This was exceptionally written and will be a fav of mine now.

    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Holy s.hit man. I am speachless. This is beautiful. I love it. I love it. I love it. I have nothing else to say.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I have nothing to critize about this lovely poem. The style is smooth and clean..the words are like heart beats.. to think of someone as a tear of God is just wonderful. Nobody could have done this better because this was written with love and caring. I think this person is really special to you and made you a very special person as well. This is what I was waiting for...Welcome back!!!

    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      First I'd like to say that you are a very good story teller. I'd also like to compliment your rhymying skills because I did not find a pair of lines that I thought was off. This is an excellent story, and I'm sure it holds great meaning to you, but as a stranger looking in it is hard for me to see what you see.

    I do not think your name is Audrey Jane, seeing from your ASL. I googled the name and I do not think you're speaking of Audrey Jane lingerie, and unless google has failed me miserably I dont think this is a famoud person I am unaware of, however that just may be the situation as I am fairly young and dont know much. Still I think this is someone in your family and for that reason and that reason only I am unable to get much from this piece.

    Now while I did enjoy it and believe you are telling a beautiful tale it seems unfinished to me. Perhaps this is just a tale showing how God "runs" the world (dont take that in wrong content because I am a Christian and I believe deeply in God), but thats all the meaning I can get from it.

    Overall though I want you to know I enjoyed this piece. The rhyme was excellent and again you are a great story teller.

    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... this is a WOW! This is the most wonderful thought, that tears can turn into something beautiful, despite the turmoil that comes with them... even if it's a metaphor, it's a really good one. Maybe something comes from every tear... we just don't produce life, as in this poem, but maybe they pool and become something else that counts in some way to a bigger picture that we can't even comprehend.

    And I really like the name "Audrey Jane" now... Very nice piece, I really wish I could have thought up something this cool!
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]

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